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Violence in the media promotes violence in society. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays,
media
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 is an important part of life for
children
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 and the elderly.
People
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 watch it to learn or entertain.
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, a segment of society is convinced that broadcasting violent content may cause the promotion of
violence
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 in society. I completely agree with
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 opinion due to several reasons that I will
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 discuss in
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 essay. To commence, many
media
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 programmes use
violence
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 to grab the viewers attention.
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 works particularly well with the younger
children
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 and adolescents that look for the thrill.
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, according to recent studies,
children
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 that are exposed to
violence
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 in the
media
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 become aggressive and lack empathy. To illustrate, younger
children
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 and adolescents spend around 6-7 hours a day watching TV and playing video games. It means that they are greatly influenced by the content they view.
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, depicted cruelty can make them more aggressive and violent towards others. Adding
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, brutality shown in movies is heroic and
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 blindly imitate their behaviour. Take,
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, Batman. For many
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, Joker is a real hero,
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 he is a negative character who kills innocent
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.
Children
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 and adolescents are misled and told that
violence
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 is good and that it can help to solve problems.
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, in video games, brutality is encouraged. Because a child playing a video game does kicking and killing with delight.
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, they accept
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 behaviour as normal and later, do it to their friends. To conclude, the
media
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 plays an important role in our society.
Children
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 and adults exposed to violent content will unconsciously be more aggressive.
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