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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest dealing with this situation?

#professionals #doctors #teachers #countries #work #situation
Nowadays, many
professionals
 like doctors and
teachers
 choose to relocate their workplaces- they move to developed countries. Reasons vary behind it as they want to obtain a more enjoyable living environment,
higher paying
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 and
thus
 lead themselves to a quality life.
However
, the situation exerts
negative
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a negative
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 influence on the
country
 they once worked for. The loss of
professionals
 results in many social problems. In Africa where WHO appoints many
voluntory
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voluntary
 doctors every year, many kinds of
epidemic
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 or diseases spread widely due to the lack of doctors.
Thus
,
diesases
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diseases
 cause death easily and post
adversed
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adverse
advertised
 influence on
country
's stability and well-being. What's more, countries lack
of
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excellent
teachers
 or tutors suffer. Having less good
teachers
 means children can not receive
good
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edcutaion
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education
 and
thus
 can not be equipped with good abilities and skills to build
country
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the country
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. In China, there are many rural areas where
call
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 for
voluntory
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voluntary
teachers
 every year. In those regions, only
few
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a few
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people
 could pass entrance exams to college every year, leading to a much poorer and more difficult situation for not only themselves but
also
 the local area. Education and medical care are two mainstays for every
country
.
Thus
, it is important for
government
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the government
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 to solve the problem.
Firstly
, increasing the salaries for
professionals
 is necessary. Incentives and bonuses can be
also
 awarded by different levels of
authorities
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authority
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 to show respect to them.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
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 should set and be aware of the importance of some festivals for
specific
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a specific
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group
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groups
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 of
people
,
such
 as
Teachers
' Day, Doctor's Day, Nurse's Day and celebrate them widely to create opportunities for
people
 to express appreciation to their
teachers
 and physicians so that sense of satisfaction will be improved. In conclusion, none of
a countries
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countries
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 could live without
professionals
. The larger number of talented and professional
people
 a
country
 has, the more developed a
country
 is.
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