An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest dealing with this situation?

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Nowadays, many

professionals

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like doctors and

teachers

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choose to relocate their workplaces- they move to developed countries. Reasons vary behind it as they want to obtain a more enjoyable living environment,

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and

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lead themselves to a quality life.

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, the situation exerts

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influence on the

country

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they once worked for. The loss of

professionals

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results in many social problems. In Africa where WHO appoints many

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voluntary

doctors every year, many kinds of

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or diseases spread widely due to the lack of doctors.

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diesases

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cause death easily and post

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influence on

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's stability and well-being. What's more, countries lack

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excellent

teachers

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or tutors suffer. Having less good

teachers

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means children can not receive

good

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edcutaion

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education

and

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can not be equipped with good abilities and skills to build

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country

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the country

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. In China, there are many rural areas where

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for

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voluntary

teachers

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every year. In those regions, only

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people

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could pass entrance exams to college every year, leading to a much poorer and more difficult situation for not only themselves but

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the local area. Education and medical care are two mainstays for every

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, it is important for

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to solve the problem.

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, increasing the salaries for

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is necessary. Incentives and bonuses can be

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awarded by different levels of

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to show respect to them.

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government

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the government

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should set and be aware of the importance of some festivals for

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group

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people

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such

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Teachers

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' Day, Doctor's Day, Nurse's Day and celebrate them widely to create opportunities for

people

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to express appreciation to their

teachers

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and physicians so that sense of satisfaction will be improved. In conclusion, none of

a countries

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countries

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could live without

professionals

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. The larger number of talented and professional

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country

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has, the more developed a

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is.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Skilled professionals
Healthcare systems
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Dependency on foreign aid
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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest dealing with this situation?

Fully explain your ideas

some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today every large city facing traffic jam problem. what are the causes and how can it tackle

In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?