Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To wah extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Entire the
human history, Correct word choice
The
music
have
a significant role in their life Wrong verb form
has had
such
as in the
religious Correct article usage
apply
ceremony
or even Fix the agreement mistake
ceremonies
for
Change preposition
in
pray
. So some Fix the agreement mistake
prayer
people
believe that music
can come
Verb problem
bring
people
together with
different cultures and ages. I partially agree with them because there is
some songs or even instruments that belong to a special group of folk and it is not interesting for others.
on the one hand, there are several nostalgic pieces of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
music
or national music
that all a country’s citizen
or who speak in a specific language in different Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
generation
listen toFix the agreement mistake
generations
those
. if anywhere play the song, Correct pronoun usage
apply
all
population dance Correct determiner usage
the
with
it regardless of their age and Change preposition
to
enjoy
the song. Correct subject-verb agreement
enjoys
On the contrary
, there are some music
genres that belong to special ages. for instance
, rock and roll, pop or k-pop
is interesting solely for teenagers or youth Change the capitalization
K-pop
while
the elderly like to listen to some traditional and classic music
.
On the other hand
, now a day
some English songs or Latin Correct your spelling
nowadays
music
are very popular among all nations and dance with those at their parties. also
for a number of singer concerts such
as Celine Dion and Jenifer Lopes
there are Add a comma
,Lopes
people
with various cultural backgrounds and without languages
barriers that just dance together because of the Change the noun form
language
music
. But there is some music
which is for a special part of the world and culture and other nation
can not even listen to it. Fix the agreement mistake
nations
for example
, the Australian ethnic has religious music
which plays
with a special instrument and other Wrong verb form
that is played
nation
even cannot listen to that because Fix the agreement mistake
nations
don't
have a pleasant sound.
Wrong verb form
it doesn't
To conclude
, although
there are some genres that are for just a culture or a generation, I think music
can help people
of different nationalities or different generations can
connect to each other and have a good time despite all differences.Verb problem
apply
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