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Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe that it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In my opinion planning for the future is not
waste
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 of time, for me planning is a tool that helps me to achieve my goal in order for me to have a better future. Focusing
in
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 the present is the same as what
happen
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 today will affect
of
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what will gonna happen tomorrow. So for me,
instead
 of focusing on the present why can we just plan, for us to have
guide
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 in whatever our
next
 step be successful.
First
, we need to set our priority base on
it's
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importancy
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importance
important
 and urgency.
Next
 is we should take action for that goal. And
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 for
outcome
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an outcome
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it is either we met our goal or not. If it's not succeeded we can learn from it and treat that as a lesson, but if we achieve what we planned
then
 it will take it to better reason to plan another.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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