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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, individuals have been getting the benefits of readymade
food
 and by so they are able to cope with the pace of the current lifestyle. Some people think that it is a positive development as it will not only save their
time
 but
also
 enhance variety and taste.
However
, others believe that it could be detrimental
for
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 health. In my
opinion
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 the advantages surely outstrip the disadvantages.
First
 and foremost, It helps to save a lot of
time
 for working individuals.
In other words
, with the easily available
food
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 they do not have to worry about wasting their precious
time
 on cooking
food
.
Furthermore
, due to
growing
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the growing
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food
 industry and competition in the market, the quality, taste and variety of
food
 items have been increased.
For example
, a recent study has demonstrated that working professionals are happy about the readymade
food
 as it helped them save their
time
 for other activities
such
 as gym, entertainment and work etc.
On the other hand
, another part of the society
also
 claims that
convinience
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convenience
food
 has had
negative
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 effect on one's health. According to them, because of excessive junk
food
 consumption, humankind is suffering from
vaious
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various
 diseases like obesity and indigestion. As per my perception, I think people can
also
 get healthy readymade
food
 and can avoid junk
food
. For
instense
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instance
,
the
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NDTV India (a news
chennel
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channel
) had done a survey
last
 month in which it had been found that working
professional
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professionals
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 were getting healthy and hygenic
food
 which was easily available in the markets. In conclusion, apparently, aforesaid statements
has
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 cleared the
view points
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 that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of
convinience
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convenience
food
 as it helps people spend the saved
time
 on other preponderant things rather than cooking
food
 at home in today's advanced society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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