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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, individuals have been getting benefits of readymade
food
 and by so they are able to cope with the pace of current lifestyle. Some people think that it is a positive development as it will not only save their
time
 but
also
 enhance variety and taste.
However
, others believe that it could be detrimental
for
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 health. In my opinion, the advantages surely outstrip the disadvantages.
First
 and foremost, It helps to save a lot of
time
of
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 working individuals.
In other words
, with the easily available
food
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 they do not have to worry about wasting their precious
time
 on making
food
.
Furthermore
, due to the growing
food
 industry and competition in the market, the quality, taste and variety of
feast
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 have been increased.
For example
, a recent study has demonstrated that working professionals are happy about the readymade
food
 as it helped them save their
time
 for other activities
such
 as gym, entertainment and work etc.
On the other hand
, one part of the society
also
 claims that convenience
food
 has had a negative effect on one's health. According to them, because of excessive junk
food
consumption
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 humankind is suffering from various diseases like obesity and indigestion. As per my perception, I think people can
also
 get healthy readymade
food
 and can avoid junk
food
 and
this
 is a need of the hour. In conclusion,
although
 it is a mixed bag of thoughts , I presume that
definitely
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 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of convenience
food
 as it helps people spend the saved
time
 on other preponderant things rather than making
food
 at home in
this
 advanced society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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