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Band 5

Some people believe time is money. Do you agree or disagree?

It is considered by many that
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the value
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 of
time
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 is equal to
value
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the value
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 of
money
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. I agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
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 few paragraphs.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 can earn financial resources but not
time
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. It is a
well known
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well-known
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 fact that
sucessfull
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successful
people
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 can compromise on finance, given the choice between
money
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 and
time
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 hours as
time
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 once lost can not be regained in
the
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apply
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life
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. It is the proper utilisation of the
time
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 that
people
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 are able to prosper in their
life
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.
For instance
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, famous personalities like Bill Gates and
waren
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warren
 buffet invested in
time
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instead
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 of
money
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 and were able to build a huge empire. In short, efficiently making use of
time
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 will create wealth within
the
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a
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 short span of
time
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.
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,
time
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 is a limited resource. Undoubtedly, every person in the universe
have
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 24 hours in a day to make most of it during their
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lifetime
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life
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lifetime
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time
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 due to the fact that
time
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 can bring
uncertainity
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uncertainty
 in
the
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apply
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life
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. communities must realise that success and failure
depends
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depend
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 upon the
utlility
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utility
 of
time
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 frame. To illustrate, many young minds have become
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a billionaire
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billionaire
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billionaires
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 at
early
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an early
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 age in many economies as they religiously followed the deadlines for their projects and experiments.
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, sticking to
time
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 and managing it wisely would certainly yield benefits to communities after some
time
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. In conclusion, I strongly affirm that nowadays
people
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 have
money
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 but no
time
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 and
therefore
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money
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 can be earned again and again. And due to
short
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the short
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 span of
life
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,
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it is obvious that individuals give more preference to
time
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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