In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays in Britain, when
people
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get aged, they
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to old aged homes where they spent
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rest of their life.
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, some might argue that the
government
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should take
care
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of their expenses whereas, in my
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I prefer that their family members need to take
care
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of the costs. Some might say that
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government
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is responsible to take up
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.
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is because, old
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who
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not have a family and, who leaves alone needs to be considered in
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situation.
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,An old person who is orphaned will not have any stable income to support his own costs.
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, these citizens have paid their
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necessary
taxes to the
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for
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during their prime time. So,
inshort
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in short
its logical that the
government
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should take
care
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their fellow citizens.
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, it is necessary for old
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who have their own family, needs to take
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of their fellow
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. Because, these old
people
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where
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their guardians when they were young; they had been fed and taken
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of by the
parents
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untill
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until
, the children reaches adulthood.
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,
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have been letting their child
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live in their
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for
rent free
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.
Eventhough
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,
its
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the adult's
responsiblty
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responsibility
to achieve a stable income, but it was their
parents
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who supported them
untill
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until
they reach the level of maturity.
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, it is clear that the family should take the sole responsibility to take
care
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of their elders. In conclusion, the
goverment
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government
should take
responsibilty
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responsibility
to take
care
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of the elder's who are unable to
care
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for themselves.
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, in my
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family members should keep in mind that, they will
also
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be old in the future and their children might
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repeat the same for them. Evidently, many children consider their
parents
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to be their role model and role model should never be a villain.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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