In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around?

In today's modern society, there is a sharp increase in the number of
people
who have no awareness of their
neighbours
and the meaning of
community
is lost. In my
opinion
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I strongly agree with
this
statement for several reasons. The
first
point given to support my opinion is that most
people
come to some big cities to find a job.
As a
result
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they spend the most time working and have no time to care about their
neighbours
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example
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most
people
live in buildings in a residential area but they do not know who lives
next
door to their house. Another reason worth mentioning is that the majority of
people
living in cities is immigrant.
therefore
, they do not know each other is good or bad. the fact of
people
do not know and care about their
neighbours
lead to the meaning of
community
is lost. the authorities should organize more events for their
community
to
people
feel a strong bond with each other.
thus
, they can become friendlier with each other.
furthermore
,the government should build more public space for everyone
this
can help to solve
this
problem. we should educate children
the
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important
meaninf
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meaning
of
community
with us to help them have good behaviour with their
neighbours
. in conclusion, we should be friendlier and more helpful with
people
around us. living with a
community
is better for us in society.
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