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In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around?

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In today's modern society, there is a sharp increase in the number of
people
 who have no awareness of their
neighbours
 and the meaning of
community
 is lost. In my
opinion
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 I strongly agree with
this
 statement for several reasons. The
first
 point given to support my opinion is that most
people
 come to some big cities to find a job.
As a
result
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 they spend the most time working and have no time to care about their
neighbours
. for ,
example
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 most
people
 live in buildings in a residential area but they do not know who lives
next
 door to their house. Another reason worth mentioning is that the majority of
people
 living in cities is immigrant.
therefore
, they do not know each other is good or bad. the fact of
people
 do not know and care about their
neighbours
 lead to the meaning of
community
 is lost. the authorities should organize more events for their
community
 to
people
 feel a strong bond with each other.
thus
, they can become friendlier with each other.
furthermore
,the government should build more public space for everyone
this
 can help to solve
this
 problem. we should educate children
the
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 important
meaninf
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meaning
 of
community
 with us to help them have good behaviour with their
neighbours
. in conclusion, we should be friendlier and more helpful with
people
 around us. living with a
community
 is better for us in society.
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