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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Salary is one of the most important aspects of our life because it affects our living conditions. Some
people
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 believe that it is not advantageous for the country to have few
people
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 on exceptionally high salaries. Others,
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, have believed that the government should not allow an income beyond a certain amount.
People
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 should be paid according to their
skills
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 and
level
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 of education. A person having a certain
level
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 of
skills
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,
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, a surgeon performing heart surgery definitely has a higher income compared to a person assisting him. There should be a cap on the salary as
people
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 would not work hard or get proper education as they know they won't be able to make more money.
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, the competition
level
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 in the workplace will decrease.
People
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 at a higher
level
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 will stop working hard and working to improve themselves because their hard work would not pay as they already are getting the higher pay rate possible.
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, there are benefits of capping wages. There will be equality in the workplace as employees will be at a certain
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, no one employee will be earning extravagant money in his bank account compared to a worker who only gets half of that price.
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, the wealth will be evenly distributed throughout a county In conclusion,
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 the government putting a limit on higher-paid salaries might bring equality in
workplace
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. In my opinion,
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, I believe that a salary should depend on the
skills
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 and type of job. The more you risk your life or the more
skills
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 you have, the higher the wages a worker should earn.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
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  • innovate
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