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IN SOME COUNTRIES OWNING A HOME RATHER THAN RENTING ONE IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR PEOPLE WHY MIGHT BE THE CASE DO YOU THINK IS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE SITUATION

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Current day, a large amount of people think that having a property home is significantly better than a rental
house
. Especially if those countries have poor economies. I strongly believe that the argument because it's hard to afford your living cost with a
house
 payment especially if just one person manages the finances in the family.
Firstly
, we can consider positive outcomes. Having your own
house
 can provide you with
further
 flexibility.
Also
, it can push
u
Correct your spelling
you
 to other investments because you are not going to have extra unnecessary payments. We are calling a needless amount to rent a home because it is going to be just a paying living place even though it is not your property
although
 if you have one, you can save money for future plans.
In addition
, even though high economic countries have familiar headaches with different conditions. Rental houses are costs very expensive for everyone, even if you live in a developing country and the population increasing day to day, is significantly affecting payments and makes it difficult to afford other amounts.
On the other hand
, having your own property brings many responsibilities
such
 as taxes. So it means it is not just your land and
u
Correct your spelling
you
 will be charged by the government. Even
people
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if people
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 complain about taxes and protest and support their human rights, it will never change. In conclusion, being the owner of your
house
 can have positive and negative outcomes
although
instead
 of
the
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a
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rental
house
 having one always going to be
perfect
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the perfect
a perfect
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 option.
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The essay clearly addresses the prompt and provides a balanced view of both the positive and negative aspects of owning a home versus renting.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which aids in coherence and cohesion.
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The points are generally well-supported, providing a good level of detail to the reader.

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