In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hairstyles according to latest fashion? Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Wearing all
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of garments is a daily ritual that everybody does ,
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around the world are seeking trending
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cloths
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and hairstyles.In
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will explain why
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is happening
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feel
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has a negative development. Bragging among society and friends is a primary reason behind
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.A lot of
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these days shop latest fashionable
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cloths
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just to showcase their opulent garments.
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, my brother saves his money just to buy trendy
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sneakers which are three times more expensive than off trendy sneakers just because he can show
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to his friends and society by thinking it will make him look prominent than others.Some
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pursue
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because they often think that wearing
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regiments make them look younger and attractive.A good illustration of
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is my uncle. My uncle is 39 years old but he buys trendy fashionable garments just to look younger.Above mentioned reasons led
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around the globe.
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of fashionable
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is everywhere it has a negative influence on youth.Youngsters are among the
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who crave
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cloths
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and hairstyles.
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trendy look which
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wish for comes with a hefty price that everybody can't afford.Those who are managing to spend money on
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craving are struggling financially.
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, a survey by
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CNBC
depicted that about 36% of youngsters from 15-29 spend 30
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of their earning in buying these
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cloths
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which
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leading them into
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. To conclude ,
desire
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of showcasing their
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cloths
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makes them look superior is a false perception ,
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, it has a bad impact on youth
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as well
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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