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Some people believe that it is ok to put the needs of humans over environmental concerns. While others feel that protecting the environment should be prioritized. Discuss both views and what is your opinion?

#people #ok #humans #concerns #environment
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 humans over the environment or
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 has been a debatable topic
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 a century. To tackle
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 to fight against what they feel is disadvantageous in their perspective. When it comes to the needs of humans, anti-environmentalists believe, that as humans we should never
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 on our needs and use the resources available on the planet. They never negotiate on
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 the resources available but not get too greedy
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 their needs. In my opinion ,environmentalists are right.
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