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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks.These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks.These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of
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the day
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day to day
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 consumption of various nutrients like
sodium
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,saturated fat and added
sugar
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 in meals and snacks in
USA
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the USA
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.In general,
sodium
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 has the highest intake followed by added
sugar
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.All the minerals are consumed in
lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage during
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breakfast
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. The consumption of
sodium
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 accounts for approximately 43% of the total intake being the highest of all which being followed by added
sugar
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 accounting for close to 42%.
Sodium
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 and added
sugar
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 are absorbed
in
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 the highest rate during dinner and snacks respectively ,
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 the same is consumed
in
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 the lowest rate accounting for around 14% and 16% during
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breakfast
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.
Sodium
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 has
the
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an
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 equal
percent
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per cent
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 of consumption during
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snacks and
breakfast
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 accounting
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 around 14%. It is
infered
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inferred
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 that almost all the minerals have
lowest
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the lowest
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 intake during
the
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apply
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breakfast
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 ranging from 14
percentage
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per cent
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 to 16
percentage
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per cent
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.Added
sugar
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 and saturated fat
is
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 consumed in
the
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an
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 equal proportion during
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apply
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breakfast
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 hours.
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