Nowadays there is an increase in people with an unhealthy diet and not doing enough physical exercises. What do you think might be the reason? What can be done to encourage people to have a healthier lifestyle?

It is believed, that the number of citizens with an unhealthy
food
pyramid and less physical activity becomes more and more.
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lifestyle
and possible solutions
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this
problem
such
as changing eating habits or restrict unhealthy fast
food
stores.
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,
people
replace their active
lifestyle
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passive due to
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rapid
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developing
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an unhealthy diet and
the
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obesity
problems.
People
become lazier by reason of computers provides high range opportunities for them.
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result
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it causes less physical exercises and citizens pay less attention to control their eating habits.
Consequently
, men face
obesity
and other health illness.
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, about 57% of American office workers have
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lifestyle
and
as a result
just under
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30% of them have
obesity
issue
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. One of the possible solutions is encouraging
people
to pay attention to their
food
pyramid and reduce
number
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of
fast
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food
establishments. Active advertising of a healthy way of life contributes to a change in
people
's opinion about their way of living.
Moreover
,
this
method has
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effect and will quickly spread. Government can restrict unhealthy fast
food
stores and it has
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effect on
this
problem. If
people
saw little junk
food
establishments,
then
they will feed more vitamins, proteins.
For example
, due to active advertising in England, they overcame the problem of sedimentary
lifestyle
and prevent
obesity
. To sum up, in
last
decade index of
people
, who have bad eating habits due to sedimentary
lifestyle
. To solve
this
issue, citizens should carefully change their
food
pyramid.
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