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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree ?

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It is argued sometimes that
tax
 should not be paid to the country and all the money should be kept by
people
 who have earned it. I disagree that
people
 are unnecessary to pay taxes because most of them can
benefit
 from paying taxes. Paying
tax
 has economic and security benefits. The main
benefit
 is that
tax
 can be used on national defence and public security.
For example
, the government has enough budget to build a powerful army to protect the country. The
tax
also
 can be spent on recruiting more policemen and purchasing more high-teach equipment to enhance the security level which helps degrade the violence rate and builds a safer living environment for citizens. Another
benefit
 is that a country is able to provide financial support to poverty areas and low-income populations by collecting taxes.
Tax
 can be invested in education in underdeveloped areas,
such
 as providing free job skills training, building more schools and hiring well-educated teachers. Once
people
 have the opportunities to receive Aa good education, it will become a strong motivation to the local economy, which
also
 accelerates the state.
On the other hand
, what we should not ignore is that if
people
 do not pay any
tax
 , they are more likely to have a better material life, which will encourage them to work hard in order to chase more income. In conclusion,
although
 keeping all income may bring more fortune to
people
, I hold the view that we should pay
tax
, due to the fact that it can
benefit
 all the
people
 who live in the state.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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