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It could be argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler. But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions. Which opinion do you agree with? In your essay, include supporting details.

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While some feel that
technology
 has the potential to simplify our lives, others fear that it has the potential to significantly complicate them. In my opinion, we cannot live without
technology
 since we have gotten accustomed to the comforts it brings. Cell phones and the
internet
,
in particular
, have fundamentally altered our way of life. I'll elaborate on what I mean in the
next
 paragraphs.
To begin
, the introduction of smartphones changed our means of communication. Historically, we spoke using analogue phones held ear to ear. Nowadays, we may communicate directly with one another via the lenses on our smartphones.
This
 is a well-established fact:
technology
 facilitates our lives.
For instance
, when I was a child, I spoke with my grandmother entirely using traditional telephones. Despite my desire to meet my grandmother, I was unable to do so. Thanks to the advancement of cellphones, I can communicate instantly and face to face. I've benefitted from the convenience provided by
technology
.
However
, it may be highly inconvenient for someone because it raises the chance and duration of the formal meeting.
Additionally
, the
Internet
's development has helped our purchasing, learning, and working processes. Historically, we shopped physically, selecting things regardless of price; we visited schools, receiving knowledge from instructors; and we went to work in an office, doing responsibilities in person. Individuals may now compare the prices of comparable items, acquire new skills or degrees, and work remotely over the
internet
.
For example
, I earned a certification, buy online, and work remotely, which enables me to do everything I desire with the advancement of
technology
.
However
, the
Internet
's convenience encourages me to overbook my calendar, resulting in decreased free time, which exhausts me. Individuals who think that
technology
 makes life more complicated may identify with my predicament. In short, we now live in a sophisticated technological world. I believe that
technology
 exists to better human lives.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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