In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishments. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that the number of violent offences done by young

people

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was increased significantly lately. Some

people

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believe that any criminal deserves strict

punishment

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for a severe crime no matter their age.

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essay will party support an idea. On the one hand, teenagers could be really severe, they prefer to gang up together, and they are able to keep at bay the whole school. Obviously, they know about the law and just think they could avoid the

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because of their age.

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why the offence should be applied according to the crime. It will help to prevent major crimes committed by young

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, if a teenager will know about that there is no any way to avoid

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, it will keep him from the commitment of a crime.

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, there are a lot of chances that after being in prison for a long period teenagers will become more mature criminals.

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why their

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should not be the same as for adults. It will help to correct their behaviour and lead to decreasing the level of crimes committed by the same person in future. Some

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think that adolescents deserve another chance, and the responsibility of society is to help them do not become real criminals. To sum up, it seems to me

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very important to prevent crimes which could be committed by teenagers.

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is the responsibility of adults to note that their children have problems with the law, and help them in time.

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Juvenile delinquency
Rehabilitation
Adolescent development
Impulsive behavior
Criminal justice system
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In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishments. Do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

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