Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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technology is
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to the level which was unimaginable few
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ago due to which
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have many options in every field .
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people
argue that aids have a strong effect on a person's choice while purchasing anything,
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consider that there is negligible effect on their decision . I agree with those who claim that it
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little
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their commitment. To commence with , As many
people
feel that
ads
really impact their decisions , the
advertisment
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advertisement
is shown in
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attractive way by the company .
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,
although
the
advertisments
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advertisements
of the food are attracting our mind towards it because they are printed in a fabulous way by which
people
can easily
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towards it , many
people
tend to go on their shop for eating that food just by watching the
ad
they are not able to stop them .
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show
ad
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minute by minute . Even though there is
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Internet
, TV , emails and so on by which company can display their product
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when we are using any
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we can find many different
ads
from
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different
companies which
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our concentration towards them .
However
,
advertisments
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advertisements
advertisement
does
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not
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a vital role in
people
's preference .
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, the
advertisments
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advertisements
are trustworthy , nowadays
people
are
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then
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than
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ever before they are not stuck or influenced by the
ads
.
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instance , if a person
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any
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ad
in front of him
then
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definitely
he will not starts
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to believe
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in that just by seeing it because now everyone has a sense of thinking deeply about that it might be wrong . Even though Mostly the products shown
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ads
are not same in the reality , they prefer to buy
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things by
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seeing
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them and judge them in front of it
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by the
ad
.
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, they take the suggestions from their family and relatives about the products , which material is best to purchase according to their experience . In conclusion ,
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in spite
the
advertisments
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advertisements
can attract the mind of the
people
to buy that thing ,
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mostly
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most
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people
like to buy the things
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the suggestions of their relatives which is
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quiet
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good for them .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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