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Many people are copying celebrities from magazines and on TV. Why is this happening? Do you think it’s a good idea to copy celebrities?

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Nowadays, most
people
 tend to act like well-known
celebrities
 that frequently show up in TV shows and newspapers. I believe it is happening because ordinary
people
 want to become more likeable and admired in their surroundings.
However
, I disagree that famous individuals can be good role models, especially for young
people
. The target demographic of internet-famous
people
 is usually teenagers or adults in their twenties who are relatively immature and easily influenced.
People
 of those ages are
also
 known for being driven by their desire to appear more appealing and popular in their friend circle.
Therefore
, youngsters try to look up to and imitate social media influencers who are highly reputed in the public. Even though it is a common thing to copy
celebrities
, I disagree that it is beneficial for those who decide to become copycats of someone else.
Firstly
, acting like a different person will lead to the loss of uniqueness, and
as a result
,
people
 who are imitating influencers will not be able to develop a distinctive personality in the long run.
Secondly
, the majority of modern big names are still young just like their audience.
For instance
, TikTok stars that got famous for doing dances on a social platform are usually students that have not even graduated.
This
 means that these
celebrities
 have not yet developed the feeling of responsibility and matureness for the actions they take. In conclusion, many
people
 these days consider TV stars to be their idols
nevertheless
, they should be more selective of
who
Change the pronoun
whom
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 to look up to since current
celebrities
 have still not matured yet.
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