You recently went to a concert and thought one of te singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter - say how you feel about his performance -give details of your musical activities -explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Mr. Carter, I went to your concert

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week and I really liked your performance. You sang with a lot of feeling, and I enjoyed the songs very much. It was one of the best concerts I have been to. I am

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interested in music. I play guitar and sometimes I sing

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local events in my town. I am not a professional, but I try to practice often and write my own songs. I think music is a good way to express feelings and connect with people. I hope you can give me some advice. Maybe you can listen to one of my songs and tell me what you think. I want to learn how to be better, and your help would be very useful

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me. Thank you for reading my letter. I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Emily Watson

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Consider adding a specific song reference or a personal anecdote to enhance emotional connection and provide more depth to your feedback.

coherence and cohesion

To improve transitions between ideas, you could use linking phrases such as 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore' to connect your thoughts more smoothly.

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The letter maintains a friendly and respectful tone, which is suitable for the context.

coherence and cohesion

Each paragraph presents a clear idea, making it easy to follow your thoughts.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

146 words

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