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Television injects violence in children, and programs with violent scenes should be banned. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Violence is escalating in our society rapidly and it is damaging the world especially the
children
. The impact of violence heavily relies on the
content
 the younger ones are watching on their
television
.
This
 essay will discuss the factors and the role of the TV shows associated with violence. In our sedentary lifestyle, the
children
 in their leisure
times
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glued
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 to the screens or gadgets
instead
 of playing with toys. As per the statistics, 75% of
kids
 spend approximately 4-6 hours
in
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watching
television
,
thus
, it can
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 the influence of nurturing their young
minds
 with violent or inappropriate
content
. As they are learning and adopting the
content
 they are watching on
television
, it can be the cause as several
kids
 are engaged in bullying in their schools. Either they can self-harm themselves or hurt their siblings in the absence of their parents. Due to less parental care and supervision, some of the
children
 got indulged in watching disturbing and wild TV programs which will be vulnerable for their innocent
minds
 and can trigger aggressive and anti-social behaviour in near future.
Furthermore
,
the
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 immense popularity of action movies and shows, some parents engage their
kids
 in watching
such
 programs which
is
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 causing them to initiate and enact
such
 violent acts in their real life.
In addition
, some crime shows
also
 create a pivotal role in spoiling young
minds
 to commit heinous crimes without acknowledging the adverse circumstances. In a
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, excessive and constant exposure of violent
content
 on
kids
 through
television
 can visualize their
minds
 with aggressive thoughts. In my opinion, parents should be vigilant in monitoring the kid’s activities and limit their
children
 to watch only
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 shows as it can drop the rate
their
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 aggressive, disturbed and harsh
behavior
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in
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 young age.
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