Many people Believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

It is universally acknowledged the truth that our
life
has been effect by social media. A great deal number of
people
are of opinion that
this
kind of social network
such
as telegram , Facebook and so on lead to a negative impact on every part of our
life
.while my opinion exactly conflicts with
this
.
This
essay will pay to some reason for my idea. Those
people
who think social media is not suitable ,maybe they consider it as time taking and attention to some bad effect on children and young
people
.
Although
I can accept their concern , it is obvious that with some tackle could be prevention by parents .
For example
, the more recreational facilities for them the more avoid of the network site. ,
Moreover
they can be taught in earliest years of their
life
how can manage their time in any kind of situation. so they to
know
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determine priority is important in
life
after that enjoyment is serious business. To me, social media not only play a crucial role in our
life
but it
also
offers a great number of advantages .
For example
, it is a good way to be aware and gets information from all around the world .Nowadays it is possible to share our information between countries and learning about things which are new in other countries. ,
Furthermore
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it is a brilliant way to communicate with other
people
.
For instance
, in
this
situation of pandemic disease that everyone have to stay at home in order to decrease disease ,
people
by using some social network
such
WhatsApp, skype , Facebook have
this
opportunity to see each other through video call.
In other words
, the relationship is better than before. Generally speaking,
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However
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some technology may have negative effects, but I believe that
this
issue
such
many other things in our
life
needs a kind of balance.we have to think about it without prejudice.
therefore
we can benefit from the advantages them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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