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Life now is better than it was 100 years ago. To what extant do you agree of disagree with this statement?

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It is undeniable that the world at the present
time
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 has had changed from the rural community into the modern community, resulting in
people
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 think that they have a better
life
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 than in the past of 100 years ago. From my point of view, I agree with
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 statement for many reasons will be outlined in the detail in the following paragraph. It is true to say that some
people
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 may disagree with these ideas because they think that the change of the world nowadays has many negative impacts on human
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.
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, many pollution problems which can be caused by the evolution in terms of the industries in many areas around the globe can create some health issues,
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 as cancer, in their livelihood.
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, these movements of many factories can make
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consume a lot of chemical materials which are very harmful
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 human
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.
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, others, including me, agree with these viewpoints because
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 change can make
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 have a lot of knowledge which can create new innovations to use in society.
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, they have advanced technologies, like the washing machine and mobile phone, to facilitate
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 due to there can help
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 to reduce
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 for making some things that are using a long
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, and these technologies can
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 make
people
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 have an easy
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 rather than ancient
people
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.
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, humans have more and more skills that are improved from ancient
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time
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,
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, they have many abilities for using to adjust in their livelihood. In conclusion, I strongly agree with that viewpoint because the transition in human
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 in each generation can affect
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life
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 at the present in many functions, like knowledge, treatment and others.
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, it is recommended that
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our globe has had altered all the
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, resulting in we have to accept change, and we must adapt to it.

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