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You stayed at a hotel last week. After you got home, you realized that you had left your watch behind. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter -Explain what happened to your watch -Describe your watch -Ask the manager to help you find it

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my concern regarding the watch, which I left at your hotel during my stay. After staying at "The Paradise" for
couple
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a couple
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 of weeks, I had to attend another business meeting. So, I was in a hurry to catch a flight, and I put it accidentally on a table. After reaching home, I
realized
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realised
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 that something
is
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was
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 missing, and that was my Zbioland snake watch. As mentioned earlier, it has a black dial
,
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 with a gold snake design on it.
This
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 watch is important for me, as my parents gifted it on my
last
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 birthday, and they engraved my name on it to make it more special. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could ask your manager to check the lost and found office, and speak to the cleaning staff who cleaned the room. I hope you
would
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will
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 definitely find it, send it
on
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to
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 my address.
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, I am ready to pay the postage fee. I look forward to your response! Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some lines are not fully clear. Say where you think you left the watch, like in the room or on the table near the bed.
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Task response: Use a more polite and clear request at the end. For example: 'Could you please check the lost and found and ask the staff about it?'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. But some ideas in the second and last parts are long. Make them shorter and easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with simple words like 'when', 'after', 'so', and 'also', but do not make the sentence too long.
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Task response: You cover all three points in the question.
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Task response: You describe the watch well with clear details.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter is in good paragraph form.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
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