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Tuition for healthy children usually has top priority in most countries. However, teaching students with disabilities or mental issues is more difficult and even more important to support and develop. Which viewpoint do you agree with? use specific reasons and examples to support your answer?

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conventional society, it is usually common to see people prioritizing their healthy
children
 and providing them
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 best education. After their formal education, they are usually seen enrolling them for extra
tution
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tuition
 support.
Although
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 opting for extra support in education is common , I think
priortizing
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prioritizing
 the specially-abled
children
 for those classes is more important as they take time to process and learn when compared to
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normal
children
. Parents & the management of educations institutions must take special
care
 and efforts to make sure that all
students
 who need more help are definitely given admissions for the
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tuition
.
Firstly
, I think the special
children
 must be taken into consideration is because they usually suffer
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 more than one
difficulties
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 and it is generally difficult for them to take
care
 of themselves as well as to even learn simple mathematics or develop linguistic abilities. Few
children
also
 need more than one person to take
care
 of them and help them in their studies. To elaborate on,
students
 with both visual & limbs impairment not only need help of
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special software to learn but
also
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care
taken
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 and psychotherapist to help to improve their movements.
Hence
,
to achieve
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 a concrete development of
such
 a child is difficult and extra time must be
alloted
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allowed
allotted
 to teach them with utmost
care
. Another important point is that
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 these
children
 take
time
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 to learn than other
students
. They cannot grasp stuff easily and concepts must be taught multiple times & attending classes once or twice with other
students
 might not help them.
Therefore
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tuition
tution
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 facility is needed for them to learn effectively. To conclude,
although
 tutions are a common choice for all
students
, specially-abled
children
 must be prioritized and additional hours must be dedicated to
teach
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 them all the required skills necessary for them to lead a normal life.
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