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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
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Nowadays, online shopping becomes more widespread all over the world.
People
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 prefer to buy
goods
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 using the
Internet
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 than going to the shopping to the city malls. Some pros and cons could be found here. The obvious argument for the benefits is the convenience of
Internet
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 shopping, most
people
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 prefer to stay at home and buy
goods
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 using online shopping. A lot of big online shops like Amazon and Aliexpress are very popular now. You can buy anything you want using the
Internet
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, from the phone to even the car. The biggest advantage is you do not need to stay in queues and spend a lot of time,
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 you have a wide choice in the online shops. And the main feature of modern life is safety, when you buy
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 from your home, there is no need to communicate with other
people
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. There are,
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, some drawbacks.
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, you can receive
goods
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 of bad quality, and if the seller is not reliable, some problems with
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 return could have occurred.
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, due to do shopping through the
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 so easy, it is could be difficult to control the expenditures of money.
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, it could be dangerous because of fraudsters, so
people
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 should be sure about the website safety, to not enter their's payment data to the wrong site, which could lead to the loss of money. In conclusion,
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 there are certain negative sides,
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 shopping is very convenient and helps make
people
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 lives easier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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