Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The future is within the
hand
of the
children
, so it becomes a necessity that the
children
learn how to behave in accordance to be
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decent human
being
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beings
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as members of society. Some believe that these
value
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values
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should be taught
in
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home
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by each of their
parents
, while others put their faith fully in
school
. In my own perspective, while teachers have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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in teaching these norms in
school
,
parents
should
also
be held accountable for their
children
characters. On one
hand
,
children
spend roughly 6 to 7 hours of their
time
in
school
, which accounts for their productivity
time
,
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time
, as well as socializing
time
.
Children
meet their friends in
school
, so it became a solid reason
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why
teacher
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the teacher
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needs to teach manners to these
kids
.
In addition
to
this
,
kids
love learning by playing, so
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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can apply
this
method easily in teaching them some norms and values for their social and spiritual quotient.
Furthermore
, most of the
times
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, students value and pay a huge amount of respect to their
teacher
, so it adds more opportunities in teaching them because most likely they will act
accordingly
to what the
teacher
says.
On the other
hand
, the responsibility should not be put solely on the
teacher
’s shoulder. Most of the
children
time
is being spent in their
home
with their
parents
or family.
This
is where the learning process
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.
This
is where they can directly apply those values they got from their
school
.
Parents
can control how their
kids
are behaving in their
home
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. They can
also
inject more
values
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during dinner or during their leisure
time
.
Moreover
,
kids
are learning by example. Good
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examples which are shown to them by their
parents
at
home
will be easily absorbed by
children
,
for
instance
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table
manner
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manners
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and effective communication between each member of the family. To conclude,
although
the schools need to teach
children
how to have
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decent
behavior
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, it
also
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in the
hand
of the
parents
to continue the teaching process as well as controlling process at
home
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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