Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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learn how to behave in accordance to be
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decent human
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as members of society. Some believe that these
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should be taught
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by each of their
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, while others put their faith fully in
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in teaching these norms in
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spend roughly 6 to 7 hours of their
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meet their friends in
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needs to teach manners to these
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love learning by playing, so
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the teacher
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can apply
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method easily in teaching them some norms and values for their social and spiritual quotient.
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, students value and pay a huge amount of respect to their
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, the responsibility should not be put solely on the
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’s shoulder. Most of the
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is being spent in their
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with their
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or family.
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is where they can directly apply those values they got from their
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can control how their
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are behaving in their
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. They can
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inject more
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during dinner or during their leisure
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are learning by example. Good
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examples which are shown to them by their
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at
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will be easily absorbed by
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and effective communication between each member of the family. To conclude,
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the schools need to teach
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how to have
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decent
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in the
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of the
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to continue the teaching process as well as controlling process at
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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