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[Detailed report of criminal act in the media can lead to negative effect on society. Therefore news media should be strictly controlled. To what extent do you agree or disagree?]

In the contemporary era,
news
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 has become
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 essential part of everybody life. It is often argued that
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 television shows some unreliable and unnecessary information which have a negative development on people and
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 need to control over
multimedia
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the multimedia
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 sector. I
am partially support
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 statement and, I will discuss some points in
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 with, the strongest argument in favour of the
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 is that, sometimes broadcast
media
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 like
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 tv, radio,
e-
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e-news
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news
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 platform to gains higher TRP, they just publish crime
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 way to grab attention from viewers.
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result
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 the criminal
be
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 aware
about
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 their
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wrongdoing
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wrong doing
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wrongdoing
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 and easily find their loophole
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 to get rid
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 punishment.
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America published a report about
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news
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 is
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 reason, that’s why they could not capture the
vicited
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visited
 person. Due to
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 they
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 impose some rules and regulations before telecast anything, the
media
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 should conduct higher authority for approval.
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, we cannot forget about
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multimedia.it is creating awareness and give information about
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and everything
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 happening around the world.
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,
for
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their informative report help to rise transparency on incidents as well as assist to get just in
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, in Bangladesh, judicial work was so slow for that reason it is take time to get justice. After
intervention
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 of
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the media
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media
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this
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 picture
is change
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 now.
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,
continuation
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 of reporting
create
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 pressure on legal people to provide clarity on
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. To conclude ,
media
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 play
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 play
on
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 society. For
their
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 some misdeed cannot reduce their importance on a nation. But
government
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 should pass some strong
law
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laws
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 on those broadcast
media
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, they cannot allow
to publish
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fake
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 or
detail
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news
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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