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The bar
chart
 shows the proportion of relationship of Australian
men
 and
women
 doing regular physical
activity
 for 2010. The
chart
 compares people’s
activity
 in terms of
age
. It is evident from the
chart
 that
women
 are more active than
men
 for all life. The high level of
men
activity
 we can see in 15 to 24
agem
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age
group
. The
men
 column is taller in compassion to
women
.
By contrast
, the
women
 column in 45 to 54
age
group
 is higher with a similar proportion of 15 to 24
age
group
. The right indicator increase 10% compared to the left. Overall, the index of
women
activity
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activists
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 in
this
group
 is the tallest proportion of all bar charts. The
chart
 illustrates that the percentage of
men
 and
women
 physical
activity
 almost level out in 65 and over
age
group
. For other
groups
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,groups
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 proportions are fluctuate, but all of them show that male
activity
 is far less than female.
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