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Describe the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city.

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The bar
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 shows the proportion of relationship of Australian
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 doing regular physical
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 for 2010. The
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 compares people’s
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 in terms of
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. It is evident from the
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 that
women
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 are more active than
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 for all life. The high level of
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 we can see in 15 to 24
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age
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. The
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 is higher with a similar proportion of 15 to 24
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 is the tallest proportion of all bar charts. The
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 illustrates that the percentage of
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 and
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 physical
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 almost level out in 65 and over
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 proportions are fluctuate, but all of them show that male
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 is far less than female.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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