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describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

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All humans like to have some free
time
 to enjoy the things they want.
Likewise
, I love to enjoy my
leisure
time
 by listening to my favourite kinds of music and, I
also
 spend some quality
time
 reading my favourite authors books.
This
 draft will discuss the merits and demerits of having
leisure
 periods with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, the main advantages of having
leisure
activities
 are, the
people
 can enjoy stress-free moments in their life. Because of that, they can be free from psychological distress and
also
 some physical diseases like Hypertension and Arthritis.
Moreover
, planning a trip with family members will help them to increase their bond with each other. To summarize, all in all, planning and doing some
leisure
activities
 not only helping the person alone but
also
it
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assists the families happiness too.
On the contrary
, by involving more in
leisure
activities
 alone make humans lazy.
For example
, some
people
 live their life without doing any proper job.
In addition
, these kinds of
people
 depend on their parents for food and clothes. They will only think about their bliss and one or another way they will become a burden to their family.
For example
, some
people
 find pleasure in taking
long
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 journey in bikes or cars and
this
 offer more tension to their family members.
Finally
, like any other thing,
leisure
activities
also
 has both pros and cons. So, limiting the
time
 and
activities
 to an extent can overcome all the cons and
also
this
 will help the
people
 to enjoy the quality period in
good
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 manner.
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