Not many young people in countries around the world go to and enjoy concerts and plays. Why is this the case? Should they be encouraged to attend?

The entertainment industry
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changed the way
people
enjoy their free time. They have made several viable options available to us through which
people
can while away their time.
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various youngsters these days
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not prefer to go and enjoy shows or plays. There are several reasons for
this
, which I will brief in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,
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the comfort zone that matters to most. Numerous young
people
in
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today's
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world are engrossed in it and they do not want to come out of it.
For instance
, availability of several shows to watch within one touch
such
as youtube, live video or channels etc.
This
engulfs them to sit and enjoy it in their own zone, without
being have
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to travel far.
Secondly
, technological
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have
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made them
to
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be deprived
from
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enjoying any
sorts
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of art.
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youth today are so much addicted to social media that they do not seem to care or encourage anything else.
For example
,
instagram
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,
facebook
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,
twitter
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,
snapchat
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etc have made
this
generation so busy that they cannot come out of it to appreciate
anythingelse
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anything else
.
Moreover
, the stress and struggle in
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of
people
have
also
taken a toll on them which puts them off to attend
such
social gatherings.
However
,
this
can be combated by following certain measures
such
as; providing free passes, attractive offers on certain deals or free meals provided during the show. As these will eventually attract the youth to attend the shows.
Similarly
, companies or firm's hosting
such
concerts should reach out
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younger
people
and tell them how it would benefit them by just attending
this
gathering.
This
way they would be encouraged to be a part of the show. To conclude, attending
such
events completely depends on their individual desires.
Hence
,
this
can be influenced by showing the right track to them.
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