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Some people believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Others, however, believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Why?

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Recently, there has been a discussion about at which
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 the
children
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 should be admitted to the schools.
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, some people are arguing that the
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 should send to schools at the
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 of six at the same time few others opine
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 by adding that, the
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 should start their schooling before six. In my opinion,
children
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 should start schooling as early as possible because it is necessary for humans to settle their life soon as possible in the competitive world.
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, early schooling helps the
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 to develop socialisation.
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,
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 is very important for a growing
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 to get adapt to the society in future.
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, problems with lack of socialisation are very common in nuclear families because of employed parents with no sibling
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. Due to
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, the
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 may tend to develop psychological problems in future.
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, these kinds of
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 will depend overly on the internet and may become a threat to the society in future.
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, a study conducted by World Health Organization proved that juvenile crimes had increased due to the overuse of the internet.
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, cognitive development in
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 starts at an early
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 because of
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, the
children
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 can learn anything easily.
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, if the
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 fail to develop the learning behaviour from childhood it is very difficult to improve their learning after they grew up.
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, it is easy to identify the mistakes of the
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 at an early
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 and the correction of mistakes
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 will be easy.
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, in my viewpoint, it is important to start the schooling to the
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 at an early
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 due to the above-mentioned reasons.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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