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Some people believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Others, however, believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Why?

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Recently, there has been a discussion about at which
age
 the
children
 should be admitted to the schools.
However
, some people are arguing that the
children
 should send to schools at the
age
 of six at the same time few others opine
this
 by adding that, the
children
 should start their schooling before six. In my opinion,
children
 should start schooling as early as possible because it is necessary for humans to settle their life soon as possible in the competitive world.
Firstly
, early schooling helps the
children
 to develop socialisation.
Moreover
,
this
 is very important for a growing
child
 to get adapt to the society in future.
For example
, problems with lack of socialisation are very common in nuclear families because of employed parents with no sibling
child
. Due to
this
, the
child
 may tend to develop psychological problems in future.
In addition
, these kinds of
children
 will depend overly on the internet and may become a threat to the society in future.
In addition
, a study conducted by World Health Organization proved that juvenile crimes had increased due to the overuse of the internet.
Secondly
, cognitive development in
children
 starts at an early
age
 because of
this
, the
children
 can learn anything easily.
Moreover
, if the
children
 fail to develop the learning behaviour from childhood it is very difficult to improve their learning after they grew up.
In addition
, it is easy to identify the mistakes of the
child
 at an early
age
 and the correction of mistakes
also
 will be easy.
Finally
, in my viewpoint, it is important to start the schooling to the
children
 at an early
age
 due to the above-mentioned reasons.
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