Some people think that the best way to motivate and encourage people is to pay according to their work. Do you agree or disagree?

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are paid equal to their job may encourage people
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better. In my
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this
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strategy
is fair and could bring good results to
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.
Firstly
,
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system, when people gets paid according to their
work
, can help
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to escape from unneeded expenses and could bring
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positive
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. If
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prefered
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strategy of working, each
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staff
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member would
work
harder. Due to
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, quality of
work
could be rise, which let
company
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achieve
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positive results and cut unnecessary expenses. And one of the clear evidence of it is the success of companies, like Google, Apple, Microsoft, which are using
this
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, the business
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prosperity
correlate with the increase of government revenue.
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stability contributes to
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society
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prosperity
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could help to increase social benefits, which may have good social
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impact
. In
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he or she could not
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suffer.
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above
mentioned into account, system, when people are paid
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their
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is equally good for business and for
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individual.
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,
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economically influence on
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. And I agree with that point of view.
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