Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

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Among different types of parents, there is a group who believes spoiling
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by giving them everything they wish and allowing them to do whatever they desire ain't a bad idea.
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approach to parenting can make children thankless and disrespectful,
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turning them into stubborn adults later in their lives. Providing
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with everything they ask for, in the
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instance, makes them ungrateful and disobedient. They'll have no respect for their elders as they think the world revolves around them; along with that,
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kids
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feel they're not required to work hard to achieve something. In a human study conducted between two groups of
kids
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, ranging from 5 to 12 years old, it was evaluated that the group who was given chocolates without any task achievement was less thankful, as compared to the
kids
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who had to do a particular task to get chocolates. So, developing a habit of performing some activity to get their desired things, make
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grateful and respectful. Individuals who were allowed to have all their wishes fulfilled in the blink of an eye, turn out to be more stubborn. Their " I deserve to be served" mindset becomes toxic for people around them,
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making them live isolated lives. A research paper regarding the sky-rocketing rates of divorces showed that in most cases, the abuser is the product of a " you can have all" kind of upbringing,
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it's not always the case. So it can be said that simple things, when done wrong while raising the young ones, can lead to disturbed adults. In conclusion, the style of raising
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that don't refrain them from doing or having anything damages their personality;
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making
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thankless, it develops obstinate
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