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Nowadays the trend of eating ready-made food is increasing. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

#trend #food
The
food
 industry has grown far above than ever before in recent years. The industry has incorporated a lot of new ideas bringing different types of
food
 into the lives of many people.
Food
 is now available as raw, semi-cooked or even fully cooked. It is completely agreed that ready-made
food
 is bought more often by the younger generation. Families where both the mother and father are working professionals find these products very helpful as it only takes less
time
 to serve a good meal to their family and children. By using the ready-made meal the entire
time
 for preparation is not required and
also
 the cooking
time
 is reduced. For example, recently we had bought the ready-made biryani pack for trying and the meal really tasted good. It
also
 took only one hour for the whole cooking process.
On the other hand
, if you want to prepare a biryani at the home it will take a minimum of three-four hours for the preparation and cooking
time
.  In spite of having these benefits, it can never be denied that healthy
food
 is always homemade
food
 and it is very essential for a good and healthy life. There are
also
 some disadvantages in consuming ready-to-eat
food
 like
this
 packaged
food
 will have preservatives. Consuming preserved
food
, in the long run, will cause health issues.
Finally
, I would conclude that there are both advantages and disadvantages of eating ready-made
food
 but the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages as we cannot compromise on health over
time
.
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