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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Successful people sometimes could be a great example of intellectual facilities, leadership qualities and sometimes maybe incredible luck. But is it correct to state that
intelligence
 always should be measured by the level of your success? According to my personal life experience, I tend to disagree with
this
 statement. Of course,
intelligence
 is important, but not
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 condition for achieving great results in life. It is much more important to be strong-willed, diligent and highly motivated. So
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intelligence
 is and how could it be measured? Modern science distinguishes different types of
intelligence
. The most common idea describes
intelligence
 as
logical
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 and mathematical abilities of a person, and it can be measured by
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 spread
IQ-test
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. But there is no
such
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easy way to determine the levels of other types of
intelligence
, e.g. emotional, physical and linguistic. Every human being is unique and has
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 to succeed in developing different types of
intelligence
. Lots of surveys prove the fact that our genes play
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 role in our abilities to progress in various spheres. Determination of person's stronger and weaker suits becomes s crucial task, so now you can find lots of
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 that can evaluate
you
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 personality and reveal the levels of all your
intelligences
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intelligence
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,
no
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 only IQ mark. Simple questions from
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test
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 are sometimes not a reliable approach to measure
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complex things as your creativity, talents in arts and literature. Neurobiology as a science, that concentrated on studying brain functioning process, can give the world
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 approach for
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determining
determine
 the kind and the quality of your
intelligence
.
Nonetheless
, the practice criterion is still the most reliable and trustful way to reveal man's
intelligence
. Your achievements in
professional
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the professional
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 area are the best scale of
intelligence
. In conclusion, whatever criteria are used to assess
intelligence
, success cannot be announced as the only means of measuring it.
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