The growing number of overweight people is putting strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extend do you agree?

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this
time, the problems which increase a
rapidly
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population of overweight
people
causes
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for the health care system, many
people
advocate that the
kay
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key

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to solving
this
issue is to do more
sports
game in
fitness
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a fitness

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club and exercise in schools. I completely agree that
thus
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this

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best way for
improve
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improving

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healthy
life
and avoided the issue of bad health in relation
with
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to

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weight.
Firstly
, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and
over weight
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overweight

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problem that
happen
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happens

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when the many
people
going wrong with style
life
eating.
In addition
, the best
solving
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for those cases when we
are care
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care

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about do athletics and exercise practice
on
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in

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sports
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club. Because of
this
,
that is
will growing new generation with the better healthier and will not
moving
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move

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into
bad
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a bad

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habit
that is
affect
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effect

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in
healthy
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a healthy

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life
.
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, at
this
time elders and
youngster
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have many problems with their style pattern, if the community
center
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and government decided to improve
quality
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of
life
for
people
by spread awareness for impact
sports
exercise in their bodies as well as for
enhance
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enhancing

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their children healthy.
Secondly
, schools play an important role in
this
issue, because the pupils are interaction with other kids more time rather than in their home.
Therefore
, the reason for
administration
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of schools is important by adding more
sports
classes into the school curriculum, as well as encouraging their students to participate in many extra-curriculum activities that will
be enhance
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enhance

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lifestyle
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the lifestyle

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for kids.
Therefore
, parents will be
a
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apply

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role
model
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models

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when encourage their children to do activities that will
be increase
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increase

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public health. In conclusion, to deal with an increasing
an increasing
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population and overweight
people
changing the lifestyle that will
be produce
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be producing

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new generation
awareness
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of awareness

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for
sport
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sports

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life
and
impact
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that is
in
life
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