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Advances in technologies and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree?

#advances #technologies #automation #labour #hours
Today, modern technologies and automation are contributing majority
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 our community. But why
individuals
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 working hours still the same?
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 will discuss
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how labourers are still important in these advances that our generation benefits
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To begin
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the
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society.
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, house chores can be finished in just a snap because of gadgets
such
 as vacuum cleaner, automatic washing machine, rice dispenser,
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 and many more. At work, comparing before sending messages is convenient to anyone, they can use email, chat and call using their phones and computers. These advances
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 everyone to make their tasks easy in
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less
of
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time.
In addition
, automation machines are produced for the people, they made it accessible to all, which they can dispense money, buy products like sodas, food,
make up
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, toys and many more in just one drop of
coin
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.
Furthermore
, even it is timely to have all of these, they are still in need of manpower. Robots and big
machineries
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 are made but humans are still the operators of these. Behind all
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 we are experiencing it is the great minds of all the inventors and workers to make it possible.
That is
 why working hours
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 not reduced. In my conclusion, manual labourers are needed
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 what we want to achieve. We are the brains and hands of all
this
 modernised world. Even we became dependable on these, they have the limitations that humans are the only capable
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 doing it.
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