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Some believe that living in an apartment are advantageous, but other argue it in contrast. Discuss both views.

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It is argued by some
people
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 that inhabiting an
apartment
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 has more beneficial sides, including keeping in touch with neighbours and being close to commercial facilities,
while
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 the reverse is true for others. On the one hand, living in a flat is the best for
people
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 because they can engage in conversations with neighbours and be on good terms with them. A growing number of
people
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 believe that if they purchase an
apartment
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 in a flat,
this
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 time they can enhance their communication skills with others by talking with them and it can supply them with knowing plenty of
people
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 who are living with them.
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, scientific research shows that
people
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 who live in an
apartment
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 adapt to a new community easily and respect other's opinions.
Moreover
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, a variety of companies and organizations tend to launch their amenities near buildings in which an array of
people
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 live . It has a significant benefit for both
people
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 and companies itself.
People
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 say that it is viable for them to buy something that they need in shop markets which are close to them.
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, there are some
people
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 who do not want to live in an
apartment
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. In their minds, living in a
house
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 is a better option because houses which are not close to any buildings have a quiet environment.
People
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 do not need to be concerned about noises which are made by neighbours. My uncle lives in a
house
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 and he is really pleased with
this
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 because he says that he can do what he wants.
For instance
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, he listens to loud music no matter what time it is.
In addition
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, if someone lives in a
house
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, he/she does not need to climb lots of stairs as
people
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 who live tenth floor in a 20-storey building if there are not any lifts. In conclusion, some
people
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 argue that accommodating in an
apartment
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 is best as it provides
people
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 with lots of facilities which are near to their living destination,
whereas
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 others say that having and living in a
house
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 has a great number of opportunities like doing what
people
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 want to do at their home.

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Grammar
Be mindful of verb tense consistency throughout your essay to maintain clarity and coherence.
Style
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance the flow and readability of your essay.
Content
Use specific examples to support your points more effectively. While you provide general examples, adding more detailed scenarios could strengthen your argument.
Clarity
Ensure the clarity of your pronouns (e.g., 'it,' 'they') to avoid ambiguity.
Content
Your essay does a good job of discussing both views on the topic, offering a balanced perspective.
Coherence
You have effectively used linking words to connect ideas, contributing to the essay's overall cohesiveness.
Structure
Your introduction and conclusion are clear, encapsulating the main points of your essay effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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