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The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

#children #books #fun #years
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modern society has faced another challenge in
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youth upbringing, namely, a lack of
children
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 other entertainments.
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Informational technology and lacking
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time
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parents
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time
. For the purpose of
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further
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first
 reasons that
children
 quit reading
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books is the world's worship
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Information technology. Indeed, today more and more schoolers own different types of mobile devices with
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constant access to the Internet. They find it simpler and more exciting to spend their
time
 with gadgets
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 of "investing" it
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 reading. Another reason
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 the examined problem is that busy
parents
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failure
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 to convince their
children
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benefits
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 of reading. In
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 they often demonstrate their descendants a bad example by choosing to watch TV or play computer games rather than to read a book. In terms of possible
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first
 option that comes to mind is to restrict kids' access to
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gadgets and to increase
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time
 on spending with the book reading. Well, it is easier to say than to do so.
Thus
, to reach
this
 target the
parents
 should work hard on revealing their
children
's hidden interests and potentials. Knowing kids preferences the adults can provide age and interests appropriate books that might intrigue the little ones. After reading a couple of fascinating novels
children
 would definitely ask and search for more of these.
In addition
,
parents
 should demonstrate by their own example how fun, interesting and important is to read. To conclude, the
children
 interest in reading has decreased due to a few reasons, namely uncontrolled access to
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Informational technology and gadgets, and lack of
parents
 attention to the reading issue. I strongly believe that
parents
 involvement is a number one component in the path towards developing reading habits among the young generation.
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