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Some people think that newspaper are best ways to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news more effectively through other media..

#people #newspaper #news #media
Never has the topic concerning
news
 failed to attract our attention.
However
, when it comes to the channels we get
news
,
people
 hold divergent opinions. Some are quite adamant that learning
news
 through
newspapers
 is more beneficial for
people
, while others posit that getting
news
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form
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from
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news
media
 are effective.
For
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 my own perspective,the two opinions are not mutually exclusive. It is undeniable that obtaining
news
 from
newspapers
play
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a
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 important role for
people
.
First
 and foremost,
news
 on
newspaper
are
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 more reliable than other kinds of
media
.
These
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news
 are dominated by
government
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 and written by professional journalists, which will make them neutral and accurate.
Moreover
, it is suitable for
people
 that form different age groups to read
news
, it is widely acknowledged that
newspaper
 can be easily bought without any technological means, under
such
 circumstances, it
not
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 difficult for elders to learn about
information
 through
newspapers
 since they are not
adapt
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adept
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 at using
internet
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the internet
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 or other technologies.
Although
 the benefits of learning
news
form
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from
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 are conspicuous the bonus of obtaining
information
 on other
news
media
 cannot
be underestimate
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.
To begin
 with, it can boost the economy for remote areas. It can be seen that
information
 on far-flung areas is limited if
people
 only
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rely
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relay
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rely
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 on
newspapers
. Whereas other
news
media
 can alleviate
this
 phenomenon of
information
 blockage. In the long run, it can stimulate the improvement of
local
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 economy.
In addition
,
news
media
 offers a wider
selections
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selection
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 than
traditional
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 way.
As a result
, there are more professional knowledge and
latest
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news
 from different fields are provided to
people
.which is more beneficial for academic learning. To sum up, both
newspaper
 and
news
media
 can serve
its
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their
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 intended purpose, only when we use them in
proper
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a proper
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 way.
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