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Examine the arguments in favour and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue.

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Animals
 have been used for research purposes in the ancient and
modern day
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 ,
this
 has proved researchers right and wrong in equal measure,
this
 essay will explore the advantages and disadvantages' and draw a conclusion in the end.
To begin
with
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 since time immemorial
animals
 have been used for analysis especially in matters related to health
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in-order
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 to give medicine
that is
 safe for humans and trusted by the masses
thus
 approved by
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center
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 for disease and control among other
health related
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 bodies.
For instance
, rats are commonly used for investigative reasons purposely dedicated to
peoples
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 well being it is always quoted in many drug pamphlets that medicine was tested and is safe for humans.
On the other hand
,
animals
 are endangered whereas they should be protected once an experiment is carried on any critter it is not definite that
this
 creature will overcome the side effects of the medicament in question
this
 could result
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 complications or even death
thus
 the species is at risk of being wiped out, as earlier defined,
besides
 rats ,monkeys are
also
 considered for
this
 exploration among other creatures with a notion from scientists that they have a resemblance to the human beings.
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example
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animals
 used in biomedical research have suffered and died in the laboratories
this
 is rarely a topic of discussion and reduces their numbers every single day. In conclusion, there is a strong case for use to advance scientific and medical knowledge, and in assessing the safety of new medicines. The use of
animals
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 should only be when there is no alternative
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 and should be subject to careful regulation.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controversial
  • prevalence
  • scientific research
  • proponents
  • opponents
  • medical breakthroughs
  • vaccines
  • treatments
  • critical data
  • regulatory frameworks
  • ethical guidelines
  • minimize suffering
  • moral objections
  • animal rights
  • species differences
  • unreliable results
  • alternatives to animal testing
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • volunteer microdosing
  • nuanced
  • complexity
  • weighing
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