At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adult, compared with the number of older people. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is true that nowadays the number of teenagers have been increasing in some parts of the world.In my
opinion
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a good
society
has more young
people
due to
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several reasons. On the one hand, having a community
accupied
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occupied
with a lot of
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elderly
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leads to several problems. When
people
become old they will be less patient and curious about new innovations. So, if a new version of
car
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was manufactured to be more
environmental
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friendly and automatic, older
people
might still want to use their older car and they will not have any passion to buy
this
new
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version
versions
of
vehicles
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. Apart from
this
, these individuals receive
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as they have retired already.
Thus
, not only they are not a productive member of
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sociey
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society
but
also
they are mostly users . The chance of serious diseases
such
as Alzheimer might be more in these ages,indeed. Their children ,
then
,
most
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take care of them,
otherwise
, governments should consider
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some solutions to facilitate their life.
On the other hand
, a country with more adolescents has more chance of economical and other aspects of
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growth
. If a proper investment is done
on
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this
part of
the
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society
, they can make the future of their country better.
For example
, In India
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government
goverment
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has started to invest
on
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their young citizens, and it is estimated that in the following 5 years ,
this
country will experience
a
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considerable
growth
in terms of economical
growth
.
By contrast
, unfortunately, in
Iran
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a high proportion of
geneous
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generous
genes
graduates have started to migrate to
another places
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another place
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in search of better life quality and more wages. Teenagers
also
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keen on following
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lastest
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news,trends and fashions.
As a result
,
this
community is more lively with more motivated
people
.They can help money circulation in
the
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society
and deter
from
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inflation. They mostly have to work to earn money to pay their basic necessities
such
bills
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and taxes. So, they can
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much more productive. In conclusion, I think a
society
with more innovative and
energitic
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energetic
youngsters has a more chance of
prosperious
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prosperous
and
growth
in different fields.
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