Some people believe that the increasing use of the computers and the mobile phones has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills, TO what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that, growing usage of digital gadgets
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as personal computers and mobile devices has a detrimental consequence on adult people’s understanding and creative capacities.
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I agree that these advanced machines have bad effects on teenagers’ natural capabilities, we cannot deny the benefits of these healthy tools either. As we all know, we are evolving into a futuristic, artificial intelligence-based society ;
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, everyone is using the latest chatbots like ChatGPT and Llama.
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, everyone is using these chatbots to produce creative essays and understand stories.
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, using
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tools basically means no creative writing and understanding by the youth.
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, even when I have to write an email, I just simply give the prompt to GPT to write that for me and sometimes use the internet to understand PDFs as well. These arguments show us that the growing trend of using computers and hand-held devices for thinking tasks is damaging the young generation’s natural capabilities.
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to the disadvantages, there exist a lot of advantages for youngsters in utilising futuristic gadgets to improve their efficiency and to save their time.
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, youngster can use an intelligent machine to do their studying and writing quickly.
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, I utilise my personal computer’s internet to help find different synonyms
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I am noting or scanning.
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, many young fellows utilise their tablets, laptops to improve their English writing capabilities. To illustrate
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, let's take an example of my friend who writes an essay on a machine software which
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tells him his mistakes. In light of the above facts, I agree that the increasing trend of having computing machines has severe effects on the youth’s written and oral skills.
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, I believe that
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the number of benefits these systems bring for our youth is far greater than their disadvantages.

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Task response
Make your view clear in the start. Say if you agree or not in the first paragraph and keep that view through the essay.
Coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea and a clear opening line that shows its point.
Coherence
Give more real and specific examples. Explain how these tools help or hurt, with simple details.
Language
Use simple words and short sentences. Check mistakes like grammar and comma use.
Task response
End with a clear, firm restatement of your view.
Content
The text shows an idea and some links between ideas.
Content
There is a use of examples from life and tech.
Structure
There is a closing line that repeats the view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • read
  • write
  • skill
  • student
  • young
  • people
  • use
  • more
  • less
  • good
  • bad
  • help
  • harm
  • change
  • time
  • school
  • book
  • page
  • word
  • sentence
  • paragraph
  • idea
  • example
  • practice
  • teacher
  • class
  • home
  • work
  • learn
  • easy
  • hard
  • computer
  • phone
  • internet
  • readers
  • clear
  • writing
  • reading
  • typing
  • feedback
  • edit
  • short
  • long
  • text
  • balance
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