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People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world, what are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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The natural
world
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 important paper in our lives but the majority of
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people
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 have a small understanding
about
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 it. Since we are part of
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 natural environment,
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us
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as
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 human beings are losing the understanding and the
importance
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 we have about
the
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nature
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.
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,
in
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this
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 paper will
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 and outlined the reasons
people
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 have little understanding about the natural
world
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. As same as how they can learn more about
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 topic.
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, there are many reasons why
people
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 have little understanding of the
importance
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 of the natural
world
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.
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, the
first
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 one would be the
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 usage of technology by
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humanity. It is not only ship-based technology. Actually,
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changing
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 began in
england
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 in the industrial revolution, when
people
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 start migrating from their farms to cities to work in factories,
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 losing their contact with the natural
world
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.
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, these changes that happened in the
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 more than one hundred years ago, had a deep impact
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people
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 losing their contact with
nature
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. Today, in the
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twenty
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first
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 century
people
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 living
at
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 the city do not know how to prepare
a
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natural medicine, since they do not have
directly
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 contact with
the
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nature
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. Their lives are no longer leaned to the natural
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, but to the technological one. Since it is happening,
people
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 are suffering
with
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 their health and
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 are
distroying
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destroying
this
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 natural environment.
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, there are not many things that can be done by the
people
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 themselves, since they are not aware
about
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 the
importance
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 of
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 understanding. Actually, it is more a
governamental
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governmental
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which could make their society more aware
about
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this
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 understanding.
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,
people
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 who already know
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importance
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about
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 the natural
world
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 should teach others the
importance
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 it
have
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 to their lives. As mentioned before, governments could teach their society with
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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 in different media channels, teaching them the
importance
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 and advantages they would have knowing more about
nature
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.
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, it might be hard for
people
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 to be more aware
about
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 the natural
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 if they are far from
this
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 environment. The best way it can be done is
by
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 the help of their government and those who already know
this
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importance
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 and teach them what they should know.
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