People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world, what are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

The natural
world
has
a
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important paper in our lives but the majority of
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people
have a small understanding
about
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it. Since we are part of
this
natural environment,
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us
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human beings are losing the understanding and the
importance
we have about
the
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nature
.
Therefore
,
in
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this
paper will
discussed
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and outlined the reasons
people
have little understanding about the natural
world
. As same as how they can learn more about
this
topic.
As a result
, there are many reasons why
people
have little understanding of the
importance
of the natural
world
.
Therefore
, the
first
one would be the
increase
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usage of technology by
the
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humanity. It is not only ship-based technology. Actually,
this
changing
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began in
england
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in the industrial revolution, when
people
start migrating from their farms to cities to work in factories,
consequently
losing their contact with the natural
world
.
Nevertheless
, these changes that happened in the
england
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more than one hundred years ago, had a deep impact
in
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people
losing their contact with
nature
. Today, in the
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twenty
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first
century
people
living
at
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the city do not know how to prepare
a
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natural medicine, since they do not have
directly
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contact with
the
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nature
. Their lives are no longer leaned to the natural
world
, but to the technological one. Since it is happening,
people
are suffering
with
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their health and
also
are
distroying
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destroying
this
natural environment.
Therefore
, there are not many things that can be done by the
people
themselves, since they are not aware
about
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the
importance
of
this
understanding. Actually, it is more a
governamental
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governmental
issue,
in
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which could make their society more aware
about
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this
understanding.
On the other hand
,
people
who already know
this
importance
about
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the natural
world
should teach others the
importance
it
have
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to their lives. As mentioned before, governments could teach their society with
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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in different media channels, teaching them the
importance
and advantages they would have knowing more about
nature
.
As a result
, it might be hard for
people
to be more aware
about
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the natural
world
if they are far from
this
environment. The best way it can be done is
by
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the help of their government and those who already know
this
importance
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and teach them what they should know.
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