Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. ​ What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

Majority
Correct article usage
The majority
show examples
of people consider that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
enormous
violence
can occur massive social issues in our days.There are several types of
violence
in scenes of the films as bullying,beating one person with
group
Add an article
a group
show examples
of people, robbery and sexual
violence
. The obvious solution for that are
realize
Fix the infinitive
to realize
show examples
the limits of
age
in websites, make unavailable the website for people which have problems with psychology. It is well-known that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
almost all the websites in which play films, do not have restricts
of
Change preposition
on
show examples
age
. Respectively,
child
Add an article
a child
the child
show examples
which the
age
can not allow
to watch
Change the verb form
watching
show examples
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
can take over the wrong things and thoughts,
also
actually believes that it is blissful and completely repeat it.
Consequently
, year after year of watching these scenes, the positive mind of children about that will grow to the interest to try it.
Therefore
, on television is possible to hear the suicides or
crime
Replace the word
criminal
show examples
actions of underage residents. In spite of the fact, many underage prisoners do not admit the error which they
are commit
Change the verb form
are committed
are committing
show examples
. Supposedly, the process of fix
this
problem is extremely difficult, but the chance
is exist
Change the verb form
exists
show examples
. As previously said removing the websites without
restricts
Replace the word
restrictions
show examples
of
Change preposition
on
show examples
age
, is
better
Add an article
a better
the better
show examples
option. The alternative solution
fot
Correct your spelling
for
that is
strong control of parents. If
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
the parents of
kid
Fix the agreement mistake
kids
show examples
regularly check the story of
browser
Correct article usage
the browser
show examples
and what kind of videos they watched, I guess problems with it do not occur.
Instance
Add an article
An instance
The instance
show examples
of
this
is certain parents which absolutely controls their kid. To sum up, I think necessary
immediately
Change preposition
to immediately
show examples
solution of
this
problem,because psychology films with
violence
have
Correct article usage
an affect
show examples
affect
Correct your spelling
effect
show examples
of
Change preposition
on
show examples
children more quickly.
Submitted by zhadyra.serikbayeva2016 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Read more in the eBook

The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »

* free ebook for Premium users

Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
What to do next:
Look at other essays: