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Some people say it’s a waste of time to plan for the future. We should live in the present. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Planning ahead for
future
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 is
most
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 crucial aspect
for
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 human
life
.A chunk of
individuals
 opines that to reduce stress people should live in the present whilst others are sceptical about it.I;
however
 believe that
this
 approach has its own benefits but they planning for
future
 is more advantageous for a person.
To begin
 with,planning for the
future
 is
cornerstone
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the cornerstone
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 of success.
For instance
,
individuals
 lacking plans get derailed from their track and met with failure so goals give us focus and motivation
that is
 essential for the path to achieve better results.
Moreover
,there is
widely
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 held opinion that
subconscious
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 mind works like a targeted missile,we will get on what we put concentration.
Lastly
,
plan
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the plan
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 can get us prepared for the
future
such
 as the habit of saving money from
early
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 stages of
life
 can help us through difficult circumstances.
For instance
, one of my friends started preparing for his
ipc
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IPC
 exam while we were in school
this
 helps him to clear his exam in
first
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 attempt
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therefore
planning
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 give
better
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a better
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 understanding of the issues.
On the other hand
,numerous
individuals
 have the notion that
live
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 a
life
 of happiness and
stress free
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stress-free
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,they should have to live in the moment.Some people tend to overthink
about
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the
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future
 events as consequence they
overwhelmed
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 by anxiety and other mental problems.
For instance
,nowadays,students are under pressure due to rising competition
this
 will not only
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effect
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 their academic
score
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scores
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 but
also
 deteriorating their health. To conclude,I believe that planning ahead is vital to achieve success and it
keep
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 us away from distractions that can prove negative to
individuals
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an individuals
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life
 even though it may be
bit
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a bit
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 peeved.
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