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Many people believe that television programs are of no value for children. Do you agree? Why or why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response.

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It has been a considerable debate whether televisual media provides bad influences and disadvantages to
children
 or not. Some party argues
children
 learn nothing but negative things from
television
, but others opine that not all
television
channels
 not good. I personally accord with the latter argument that there are positive and negative contents provided by
television
. As we might have known that several
television
programs
 display violent acts by the actors, pornography content as well as disrespectful languages. Whereas, the young adolescent who watches those negative contents consistently, may become the more aggressive and disrespectful person. To exemplify, a kid hit his colleagues aggressively during the school break time because inspired by a character featured in the
television
 program.
Thus
, it can be said that
television
programs
 may cause
children
 to grow in a negative manner. On the flip side,
television
programs
 provide several advantages to the development of
children
. Several
television
channels
 provide
children
 with general knowledge, science and teach them good character.
For example
, when I was a kid I consistently watched mandarin
channels
 and dramas. As the result, today I can speak mandarin fluently even though I did not take any course or learn it in school.
In addition
, there are several
television
programs
 that are regarded as educational
programs
,
such
 as national geographic and animal planet
channels
.
Therefore
, it is proven that
television
programs
 are
also
 beneficial to
children
. Based on the foregoing, we can conclude that
television
programs
 comprising of negative and positive content for
children
.
However
, parents are still responsible to supervise and filter the
television
programs
 that should and should not be watched by
children
.
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