The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the level of violent crime in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The amount of violence is becoming increasingly popular in every society. To decline the number the criminal activities, the government must be responsible and limited the scene in film and T.V. I completely agree that communities should be aware of the
violence
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influence. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the connection between media and crime's rate.
To begin
with, the number of bloody movies is increasing gradually.
Moreover
,
people
consider actors and actresses as
a
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role
model
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, they imitate their performance, actions and lifestyle.
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, Game of Throne a movie base on killing and stealing. It is overrated, a lot of
people
from different countries and various group ages. If young or adult
people
keep watching it, they think it is normal.
Also
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some movies
such
as
Roben
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Hood, the main character used to steal from rich
people
and gave it to poor
people
, or stole a ladder from tall men
then
gave
to
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short women.
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,
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will consider Roben as
hero
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and they will try to be
as
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him.
As a result
, the rate of criminals will increase and society will get hurt.
In addition
, a lot of films show that education and morality
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essential and illustrate a bad person as a protagonist. If you want something, you will take it by force.
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, a movie
that
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called a Green House, compared
between
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a person that complete his studies
in contrast
with the one who broke the law. To sum up, films and T.V have
a harmful effects
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in
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the
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society, they rose the number of violence, so
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government have to keep an eye on these works.
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