The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the level of violent crime in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The amount of violence is becoming increasingly popular in every society. To decline the number the criminal activities, the government must be responsible and limited the scene in film and T.V. I completely agree that communities should be aware of the government have to keep an eye on these works.
violence
influence. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the connection between media and crime's rate.
Replace the word
violent
To begin
with, the number of bloody movies is increasing gradually. Moreover
, people
consider actors and actresses as a
role Correct article usage
apply
model
, they imitate their performance, actions and lifestyle. Fix the agreement mistake
models
For example
, Game of Throne a movie base on killing and stealing. It is overrated, a lot of people
from different countries and various group ages. If young or adult people
keep watching it, they think it is normal. Also
some movies Add a comma
,Also
such
as Roben
Hood, the main character used to steal from rich Correct your spelling
Robin
people
and gave it to poor people
, or stole a ladder from tall men then
gave to
short women. Correct pronoun usage
it to
Thus
, individual
will consider Roben as Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
hero
and they will try to be Add an article
a hero
the hero
as
him. Change preposition
like
As a result
, the rate of criminals will increase and society will get hurt.
In addition
, a lot of films show that education and morality not
essential and illustrate a bad person as a protagonist. If you want something, you will take it by force. Add a missing verb
are not
For instance
, a movie that
called a Green House, compared Correct pronoun usage
apply
between
a person that complete his studies Change preposition
apply
in contrast
with the one who broke the law.
To sum up, films and T.V have a harmful effects
Correct the article-noun agreement
harmful effects
a harmful effect
in
Change preposition
on
the
society, they rose the number of violence, soCorrect article usage
apply
Add an article
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